The Conqueror

Hi everyone,

this is a story I wrote for my IEW writing class.

I hope you like it

( The underlines mark sentence dress-ups )

The Conqueror

by Noah

An epic battle raged in the city of Persia, the Persian Army was getting gradually smaller by the minute, because the enemy army, which was winning, was commanded by the powerful Alexander the Great! But Alexander had just become great because of a city, a king, and a knot. Here’s how.

About two days ago, Alexander the not-so-great was leading his army of twenty men to Persia. Alexander took out his lucky sundial and guessed that it was nighttime because the sun wasn’t there to tell him. Looking up to the horizon again, he spotted a wooden sign in the dirt. Alexander hopped off his horse and read the sign out loud. “Gordium 5,280 feet away. I wonder which way it is?” Alexander wondered. Then he turned and saw another sign that rudely read “East, dummy!” When they arrived at Gordium, they dashed in and immediately tried to find inns to stay in. They all slept soundly...all except for Alexander who kept having strange dreams on how to untie strange knots.

In the morning they gobbled up breakfast and headed out the door. They were about to leave the city when Alexander spotted something that wasn’t there last night. It was a chariot that looked like it was made of solid gold, because it was! Strongly tying it to a bronze post was a knot so insanely untieable, it would take a miracle to untie. “What is this giant knot and chariot doing in the middle of town?” Alexander asked a nearby priest, who replied. “It is a celebration of the Kings’ 78th birthday. If you can untie the knot, you get the golden chariot and the title ‘Blah Blah Blah the Great’.

It was then 12:00 pm, and people from all over came in line in front of the chariot to try to untie the knot. Alexander, who was seventh in line had to wait hours for his turn at the knot. By the time it was his turn, it was already 5:10 pm. When he dashed up to the great knot, he carefully analyzed every weak spot on the knot. He tried and tried until a thought struck him. He took out his sword and gracefully sliced it in half. Everyone around him gasped with shock because no one had thought of slicing the knot in half. Everyone came to congratulate the second man to untie the knot. After gaining the golden chariot, thirty extra troops, and a new title, Alexander the Great set out to conquer Persia and win.